Thursday, 6 August 2020

The Great Awapuni fun run!

In class we are doing recount writing and this is my recount about the fun run!
I found it easy to do my editing and re-crafting.
I found it hard to think of good describing words to paint a picture in the readers mind.
Next time I will write less and more describing words. 
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  1. Anonymous6 August 2020 at 10:06

    Hi Calais it is Tiana.H
    I really like how you write about the Awapuni School Fun Run.I really liked how you used rich words instead of boring words.Why didn't you do the Wild Lab instead of the Awapuni School Fun Run?
    Keep up the awesome work:)

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    1. Anonymous12 August 2020 at 11:41

      Kia Ora Tiana H,
      thank you for giving me back feedback! The reason why I didn't do the Wild Lab was because I really liked doing the fun run and I did like the wild lab also but I found the fun run a lot more fun to write about for me.
      From Calais :)

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